Monday, June 4, 2007

 

poetryMONDAY: Alimony (a.k.a. 'Costing the Earth')

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Sullen and still
you walked upon me
which I allowed,
smiling with secret knowledge.

But the time came, boy
when I put aside my garden
and toppled your tower,
all your hard work,
right over and took half.

This earth, like me,
is not more good,
just more patient.





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# posted by Emily Veinglory @ 10:00 AM
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This earth, like me,
is not more good,
just more patient.

I love the power in these last lines. My poetry Monday will be up later on today.
# posted by Anonymous Christine : June 3, 2007 4:17 PM
 
Yes, I love the last stanza. Tying the narrator to the spirit of the earth, and the 'boy' to the footprint of men upon the planet is really powerful.
# posted by Blogger julia : June 3, 2007 8:43 PM
 
I toppled your tower. Very powerful poem.
# posted by Blogger R.G. ALEXANDER : June 3, 2007 9:15 PM
 
may sullen boys take heed...the patience of the earth is verrrry long.

powerful images.
# posted by Blogger Joy Renee : June 4, 2007 5:53 AM
 
Loved the image of a less than patient earth. Carol
# posted by Blogger Carol : June 4, 2007 8:16 AM
 
I agree with Christine, I thought those last lines were powerful! Great poem and Happy Monday!
# posted by Blogger Rashenbo : June 4, 2007 8:35 AM
 
This is lovely.
# posted by Blogger Rinda Elliott : June 4, 2007 9:17 AM
 
ooooooh - i love it! wickedly droll and vengeful and the levels of meaning just made me jump up and down and clap in glee. no really - they did. i could read this poem over and over and over again - it's layered so richly in symbolism. xxx rhi
# posted by Blogger Rhian / Crowwoman : June 4, 2007 10:38 AM
 
Great poem. Rhian was right, it had me laughing with glee. Thanks.
P.S. Mine's up.
# posted by Blogger Ann : June 4, 2007 2:59 PM
 
Ooh, wow, Emily. That's a hell of a powerful one. Nice job!
# posted by Blogger Susan Helene Gottfried : June 4, 2007 8:00 PM
 
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